诉衷情令·月牙泉
（中华新韵）

天宜居士

鸣沙山外起孤烟。
戈壁藏人寰。
绿洲千年吐翠，
争命苦无援。

斜日下，
北风寒。
步维艰。
一滴眼泪，
乾坤何在，
岂可悲天。

（作者简介:天宜居士，本名夏金峣，贵州人，欧洲大学工商管理博士。北京大学未名湖文学社签约作家。)

点评：

当代词人天宜居士的这首《诉衷情令·月牙泉》以苍凉劲健的笔触，在极简的篇幅内构建了一幅戈壁绝域的生命图景。全词在“孤绝”与“抗争”的双重主题下层层推进，最终升华为一种超越性的人文关怀。以下逐句解析并综合鉴赏。

一、逐句解析

“鸣沙山外起孤烟。”
起句以宏阔之笔定下苍茫基调。“鸣沙山”点明地理坐标，其名自带声响动感，然而词人却以“外”字将其推远，形成空间的纵深感。“孤烟”化用王维“大漠孤烟直”，但着一“起”字，使静态的画面产生动态的升腾感。烟而曰“孤”，既是实写戈壁人烟稀少，更暗喻月牙泉子然独存于沙海中的生命状态。此句视听交融，以动衬静，瞬间将读者带入那个洪荒世界。

“戈壁藏人寰。”
第二句由远及近，笔锋陡转。“戈壁”承接上句的荒漠意象，“藏”字下得极为精妙——看似死寂的戈壁，竟深藏着人类生活的痕迹。这“人寰”二字，将月牙泉的存在提升至文明栖息的高度。一个“藏”字，既写出地理上的隐蔽，又暗含珍宝深匿之意，为下文月牙泉的出场铺垫了文明的光晕。

“绿洲千年吐翠，”
上片第三句直写月牙泉本体。“绿洲”明确点题，“吐翠”二字极具生命张力——仿佛这片绿意是从荒漠深处艰难地“吐”出，一字千钧，写尽了生命绽放的不易。“千年”时间词的置入，将瞬间的翠色定格为永恒的坚守，使人联想到这弯清泉跨越历史长河的坚韧。此处以生命的翠色，对比上文的孤烟、戈壁，色彩对比强烈，视觉冲击力极强。

“争命苦无援。”
上片歇拍直抒胸臆，是全词情感的第一个高点。“争命”二字撕开了诗意的面纱，直指生存的本质——这不是悠闲的绿洲，而是在与整个蛮荒世界争夺生存权利。“苦无援”三字更是力透纸背，将月牙泉完全孤绝的处境袒露无遗。四方沙海围困，天地不仁，这弯泉水没有任何外援可以依靠，所有的挣扎都是独自承担。此句由景入情，为下片的深沉感慨蓄足了气势。

“斜日下，北风寒。步维艰。”
过片三句，句式由长句转为短句，节奏骤然急促，如鼓点敲击。“斜日”是黄昏意象，暗示时光流逝与光明将尽；“北风寒”从触觉写环境之严酷。两句六个字，勾勒出一幅日暮天寒的绝境图。“步维艰”既可能是词人实地跋涉的切身感受，更隐喻月牙泉在岁月风沙中每存续一步都异常艰难。三个短句层层递进，从视觉到触觉再到整体感受，将艰难推至极致。

“一滴眼泪，”
此四字独立成句，是全词最惊心动魄的意象创造。词人将月牙泉比作“一滴眼泪”，出人意表又在情理之中。其形似泪——月牙状的泉水恰如泪痕；其情如泪——千年孤守荒漠，岂非大地最深沉的悲泣？这一比喻远远超越了形似层面，赋予了月牙泉以情感和灵魂：这是地球的眼泪，是时间的眼泪，更是造化对这片干涸土地的悲悯之泪。意象之精警，力道千钧。

“乾坤何在，”
承接泪意象，词人仰天发问。天地乾坤，本应是滋养万物的慈母，然而面对这滴孤泪，乾坤却似乎缺席了。“何在”二字，是质问，是寻找，更是一种深沉的困惑——如果天地有心，何以忍心让这一滴泪孤独千年？此句将个人的感慨提升至天人之际的哲学追问，格局骤然阔大。

“岂可悲天。”
结句石破天惊，以反诘收束全篇。“悲天”本是人之常情，面对孤绝之泪，谁人能不起悲悯之心？然而词人以“岂可”二字将其彻底否定。这不是无情，而是一种更为刚健的生命态度——月牙泉存在本身已是抗争的奇迹，它不需要悲悯。悲悯是对弱者的垂怜，而月牙泉千年“争命”，早已超越了需要被同情的境地。此结句将词境从哀婉中振拔，升华为一种顶天立地的生命尊严。

二、综合鉴赏

这首小令最卓越之处，在于其层层递进、回环呼应的严密结构。上片从远眺鸣沙山的“孤烟”起笔，由远及近引入“藏”于戈壁的人寰，再聚焦于“千年吐翠”的绿洲，最终以“争命苦无援”收束，空间上由外而内，情感上由隐而显。下片以三字短句陡转节奏，在“斜日”“北风”的凄苦背景下，推出“一滴眼泪”这一惊警的意象，随即跳出个人感慨，以“乾坤何在”叩问天地，以“岂可悲天”的刚健之语收束全篇。整首词如同一幅卷轴，徐徐展开，在最后的反诘中定格为永恒的张力。

词中的意象选择极具原创性。“孤烟”是生机的孤独存在，“吐翠”是生命艰难的表征，而“一滴眼泪”更是全词的灵魂意象——它将月牙泉的形态（月牙如泪痕）、处境（戈壁中的一滴水如眼中一滴泪）与精神（千年的孤独与坚韧化作悲怆与尊严）三重意蕴叠加在一起，举重若轻，令人拍案。

情感基调上，此词呈现出一种复杂的双重性。一面是“孤”“寒”“难”“泪”编织的苍凉底色，另一面是“起”“藏”“吐”“争”贯穿的不屈意志。词人没有沉溺于哀叹，而是在极致的孤绝中发现了崇高——月牙泉不需要悲悯，它的存在本身就是对荒芜的抗争，这种抗争赋予它以超越同情的人格尊严。这使人联想到曹操“烈士暮年，壮心不已”的沉雄，以及存在主义哲学中“被抛入世”却依然“自我选择”的勇毅。

语言艺术上，词人炼字功夫极深。“起”有升腾之势，“藏”有庇护之温，“吐”有挣扎之力，“争”有搏命之勇。过片三短句如铁骑突出，刀枪齐鸣，与上片的长句形成鲜明的节奏反差。结句“岂可悲天”以反诘作收，留有无限余韵，让读者在惊愕之后陷入深思。

在当代旧体诗词创作趋于风花雪月或故作高古的风气中，这首《诉衷情令》以其深刻的生态哲思与刚健的美学品格独树一帜。它既承续了边塞诗的雄浑与宋词的深婉，更注入了现代人对自然与生命的敬畏与思考。那“一滴眼泪”不是软弱的哀戚，而是穿越千年的生命勋章——在“岂可悲天”的结语中，我们读到的是一种大地的尊严，一种即便在最严酷的绝境中也要保持生命骄傲的崇高精神。

A complaint of love by Midnight Springs
(Chinese New Romance)

A paradise of paradise

There was lone smoke outside Mount Minsha.
The Gobi is a land of Tibetan people.
Oasis of the millennium turquoise,
There was no help in the struggle.

It was a slanting day,
The wind is cold in the north.
It's difficult to get around.
A tear,
Where is the emperor?
What a pity.

(Introduction: Tian Yisheng, real name Xia Jinji, a native of Guizhou, PhD in Business Administration at European University.) Peking University does not have a signed writer for the unnamed HKU literary society. )

Comments:

Contemporary poet Tian Yisheng's poem "Confessing to Love and the Spring of the Moon" constructs a picture of life in the Gobi Desert in a minimalist space with a cool and robust brush. The whole word progresses layer by layer under the dual themes of "isolation" and "resistance," and eventually rises to a transcendent human concern. Here is a sentence-by-sentence explanation and a comprehensive appreciation.

I. Explanation by sentence

"There's lone smoke outside the Mustang."
The first sentence sets the sombre tone with a grand pen. "Mingsha Mountain" points to geographical coordinates, and its name carries a sonic and moving feeling, however the wordant pushes it farther with the word "out," forming a sense of spatial depth. "Lone smoke" is changed from Wang Wei's "Lone Smoke in the Desert," but the word "start" makes the static picture produce a dynamic sense of rising. The word "lonely" for smoke is both a literal expression of the sparse populated population of the Gobi and an expression of the life state of the crescent of crescents that exists alone in the sand. This sentence blends audio and visually to move the silence and immediately takes the reader into that famine world.

"The Gobi is a land of Tibetan people."
The second sentence moves from far to near, with a steep twist of the stroke. "The Gobi" takes over the desert image of the preceding sentence, and the word "hide" is applied very delicately - the seemingly silent Gobi hides traces of human life. This word "the world" elevated the existence of the crescent of crescents to the height of civilization's habitat. The word "hidden," which both describes geographical secrecy and implies the deep hidden meaning of treasure, paves the way for civilization to appear in the crescent of crescents below.

"Oasis for thousands of years turquoise,"
The third sentence of the previous film directly writes about the lunar spring. The word "oasis" clearly points to the subject, and the word "tough" is extremely life-changing - as if this greenness is difficult to "spit out" from the depths of the desert, and the words are a thousand words, which describe the difficulty of life blossoming. The placement of the word "millennium" reduces the momentary emerald to eternal perseverance, which is reminiscent of the tenacity of this bounded spring across a long history. This place is characterized by the emerald color of life, compared to the solitary smoke and the Gobi above, and the color contrast is strong, and the visual impact is extremely strong.

"There's no help to fight for your life."
The last pause expresses the feelings of the whole word and is the first high point of emotion. The word "fight for life" tears the poetic veil and points to the very nature of survival - not a laid-back oasis, but a struggle for the right to exist with the entire wild world. The three words "suffering without help" even penetrated the back of the paper, revealing the complete isolation of crescent moon spring. The sand and sea were besieged on all sides, the earth and the sky were insensitive, and this bluff water had no foreign aid to rely on, and all the struggles were borne alone. This sentence is evocative of the scene and gives ample momentum to the deep sorrow that follows.

“The slanting sun was down and the north wind was cold. It's difficult to get around.”
After three sentences, the sentence changes from a long sentence to a short one, and the rhythm suddenly becomes fast, like a drumbeat. A slight day is a dusk image that suggests that time is passing and the light is going to run out. "The north wind is cold" describes the harshness of the environment by the sense of touch. Two words and six words outline a picture of a cold day and night. "Difficult walks" may be both a personal experience of the phrase's journey on the ground, and a metaphor for the extraordinary difficulty of each remaining step in the dust of the years in the crescent of crescents. Three short sentences step by step, from the sight to the touch to the overall feeling, pushing the hardship to the limit.

"A tear,"
These four words stand as a sentence and are the most exciting image creation of the whole word. The phraser compares the crescent of crescents to "a tear," which is surprising and reasonable. It resembles tears - the crescent-shaped spring water is like a tear mark; It is like tears - isn't spending a thousand years alone in the desert the deepest sorrow of the earth? This metaphor extends far beyond the morphological dimension and gives the crescent of crescents an emotion and soul: it is the tear of the Earth, the tears of time, and the tear in which creation mourns this dry land. The image is a warning and a tremendous force.

"Where is the ultimate destiny?"
Accepting the image of tears, the writer looks up at the sky and asks questions. Heaven and earth are supposed to be the loving mother of all things, but in the face of this solitary tear, the earth seems to be absent. The word "where?" is a question, a search, and a profound confusion - if the earth and the earth have a heart, why should the heart endure to leave this tear alone for a thousand years? This sentence elevates personal feelings to a philosophical question at a time when man is a man, and the situation suddenly expands.

"What a pity."
The conclusion surprised everyone and closed the whole story with a retort. "Sorrow" is a common human feeling, and in the face of the tears of loneliness, who cannot afford to feel compassion? However, the author rejected it completely with the word "cannot." This is not ruthlessness, but a more robust attitude to life - the existence of the crescent of crescents is itself a miracle of struggle, and it does not require compassion. Compassion is pity for the weak, and the thousand-year battle for the life of the crescent has long gone beyond the need for sympathy. This sentence lifts the context from mourning to a sublime dignity of life.

II. Comprehensive appreciation

The most remarkable thing about this small order is its tight structure of cascading, echoing loops. The first film begins with the "lone smoke" from Mount Minsha, introduces the "hidden" human world in the Gobi from far and near, focuses on the oasis of the "millennium turquoise," and finally is bound by the "struggle for life without help," spatially from outside to inside, and emotionally from hidden to revealing. The next film spins the rhythm of a short three-word sentence, introducing the alarming image of "a tear" against the sad background of "a slanting day" and "a north wind," then jumps out a personal sentiment, asking the heavens where they are, and closing the entire film with the steady words "why should the heaven be sad?" The whole word is like a scroll, unfolding slowly and being fixed as eternal tension in the final retort.

The choice of imagery in words is extremely original. "Lone smoke" is the lone existence of life, "turquoise" is the symbol of the difficulty of life, and "a tear" is more of the soul image of the whole word - it takes the form of the crescent of crescents (the crescent is like a tear mark), The triple meaning of situation (a drop of water in the Gobi is like a tear in your eyes) and spirit (thousands of years of loneliness and resilience turn into sorrow and dignity) combine to make a compelling case.

In the emotional tone, the word presents a complex double character. On one side is a bleak foundation woven by "loneliness," "cold," "difficulty" and "tears," on the other side is the indomitable will through which "rise," "hide," "spit" and "argue." Instead of indulging in lamentation, the poet finds sublimity in the ultimate isolation - the crescent of crescents does not need compassion, its very existence is a struggle against waste, a string that gives it a human dignity that transcends compassion. This is reminiscent of Cao Cao's lofty stature as a "martyr in his twilight years," and the courage of existentialist philosophy when "thrown into the world" yet still "chooses by himself."

In the art of language, a lyricist has a very deep skill in writing. There is a tendency to rise in the city, a warmth to shelter in the city of Tibet, a strength to struggle in the city and a courage to fight for life in the city. The three short sentences in the preceding paragraph, such as the riding of iron and the ringing of swords and guns, form a sharp contrast to the long sentences in previous paragraphs. The concluding sentence, "What a pity it is," ends with a retort and leaves a limited sentence that allows the reader to reflect after his surprise.

In the contemporary style of old-fashioned poetry creation, which tends to be wild or ancient, this "confessional order" distinguishes itself with its profound ecological philosophy and robust aesthetic character. It not only sustains the majesty of Bingguo's poems and the elegance of Song's words, but also infuses modern people's awe and thinking about nature and life. That "tear" is not a token of weak compassion, but a thousand-year-old medal of life - and in the conclusion of "Oh my God," we read of a dignity of the earth, a noble spirit to be proud of life even in the harshest of circumstances.

请向每一块里程碑致敬

龍龘龘

人生的道路是漫长而曲折的

每走过一座年轮，我们都值得庆幸

每走过一段路程，我们都充满了信心

让我们向每一块里程碑致敬！

旅途中的每一粒微尘

都充满了我们的汗水，

每一颗沙子

都凝聚着我们的心血

让我们再一次向里程碑敬。

向路边的每一处小草问好

对路边的每一朵山花微笑

和山坡上的每一棵树木拥抱

向树木后面的每一座山峰顶礼膜拜

对每一座山峰上的彩云尽情喝彩

向彩云上的蓝天摇旗呐喊

对蓝天上的太阳和月亮由衷赞叹

为太阳月亮身后的宇宙真心祝愿

祝愿我们所碰到的每一个人

祝愿我们的亲人，我们的爱人，我们的恩人。我们的友人，甚至我们的仇人……真心祝愿他们幸福一生，健康一生，平安一生！

祝愿我们所遇到的每一件事。

祝愿我们的喜事、丧事，好事、坏事，开心事、烦心事，痛苦事、欢乐事。

祝愿每一件事都有条有理，有始有终，

有理有节，有情有义。

祝愿我们每读过的一本书

都能唤醒更多的人

祝愿我们所说的每一句话，

都能感动更多的人。

让这个世界更加温馨。

祝愿我们所做的每一件事，

都能成为里程碑，

晤示我们的后人。

我们今天向每一块路碑致敬

其实就是致敬我们多彩的人生！

2025.1.27.22:55于贵州兴义龙腾文化事务所。

（作者简介:龍龘龘，男，媒体人，鲁迅文学员学员，北大、清华校友，微文学作家。）

Please pay tribute to each milestone

The longdada

The path of life is long and tortuous.

Every time we walk through an annual cycle, we deserve to be thankful.

Every time we walked a little way, we felt confident

Let's pay tribute to each of these milestones!

Every speck of dust in the journey

It's full of our sweat,

Every piece of sand

They are all in our heart.

Once again, let us salute the milestone.

Say hello to every little grass on the side of the road.

Smile at every mountain flower on the side of the road

Huge every tree on the hillside

Salute every mountain behind the tree.

Cheer up for the bright clouds on each mountain

Waving a flag to the blue sky over the colorful clouds

My heartfelt admiration for the sun and moon in the blue sky

My sincere wishes for the universe behind the sun and moon

I wish everyone we meet.

Good wishes to our loved ones, our lovers, our benefactors. Our friends, even our enemies... I sincerely wish them a happy life, a healthy life and a safe life!

Good luck with everything we encountered.

May we have good and tragic things, good and bad things, happy and disturbing things, painful things and joyous things.

May everything be organized and have a beginning and a end,

Reasonable, conscientious and righteous.

I wish every book we read.

We could all wake up more people.

Wish us every word,

They can touch more people.

Make this world a more welcoming place.

Wish us all the best for everything,

They can all be milestones,

Meet our descendants.

We salute every roadstone today.

It's really a tribute to our colorful lives!

2025.1.27.2: 55 at Xingyi Longteng Cultural Firm, Guizhou.

(Introduction of the author: Long dada, male, media personality, lecturer in Lu Xun literature, alumni of Peking University and Tsinghua University, microliterature writer.)）

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